I remember some other similar experiences like this situation. I
captured some frogs I found in a big pond. Those frogs were
very miniature unlike any other normal frogs. Also, they were so
cute. Me and my brother went there and caught them. We made a home for them,
but I guess they didn't like it. For some reason my brother's frog ran away at
night, but at morning a cruel thing happened. My brother's frog was standing on
the floor dead. It was because of the heat. The frog needed some water to stay
wet. And when it came out, he couldn't go back in so he got burnt to death. His
corpse was crispy and black. I can't believe this stressed the frogs so much
that they wanted to die. Now, I know that it really tortures them; I let them
be free in the pond. From that day on, I only went to the pond to watch the
frogs and wet away. The only difference about my experience and the video is
the punishment. I didn't get a punishment, but the young monk did. I think I am
better than him because I taught myself without any scolding or punishments.
In conclusion, I think that the real lesson is that we should not
hurt others even the tiniest ants. Because it will kill them, torture them and
annoy them. The movie 'Spring Summer Fall Winter and Spring' is a very good
movie even though I didn't watch it. I can tell by only watching 'Spring'. I
compared my experience about this video so I can learn new lessons from my
experience and the video's topic.
I like your example very much, but I wish you had put more of your 'thoughts' into the essay. I personally think the analysis should be at least as long as your example. What did you learn from the experience? How is your experience similar to the monk's experience? What do you feel changed within you with that experience? Think about some of these questions.:)
ReplyDeleteIt is a good essay but I also agree with Sophie. You need to talk more about what you learned. There are often more than one lesson we can learn from an experience. Good luck!
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